You are one of the few who managed to grasp and depict this movie's sad meaning through a continuous,beautiful metaphor and I congratulate you for that!
I love how little Jiro's dream starts as pure white doves. I love how it takes a realistic form as a plane when he decides to study it. It grieves me but I love how you drew his innocent planes turning into war machines which nicely depicts how a man's dream may clash and obey to the needs of society. I clap for you even drew him kissing his love which is a great irony to his choice!
Among of them all, I love the most the final image of old Jiro alone with his paper plane and the falling star. Could this falling star be his lost love or maybe his lost dream which never came true in the proper way?
No matter what, you've done an excellent job and I will always be grateful to artists like you that give way to so many emotions to be expressed!